Self Evaluation of Task Three

Self evaluation of task three

• What is the thesis for your paper?

I’m not the best at determining the thesis of a paper so bare with me. A student that plays sports is held on a different level than a student that stays indoors and reads or studies will be the one that is considered weird or an outcast.

List the main points you make in your paper

I explain how if you play athletics in school it seems to make it easier to do some things like make friends and get a little more of a break from the teachers.

The fact that when I took a step back and looked and my experience turned out to be a typical experience for most American High Schools.

I also discussed how I think it is a problem for our nation when it comes to being a world power. And if we don’t change our ways it will ultimately be our downfall.

What was the most helpful advice you received from your peer evaluation?

Before I had peer evaluation I had a paper pretty much composed mainly of the authors thoughts and based around my quotes with little information about me or my experiences

What was the most helpful information you received in class for your paper?

It wasn’t any one piece everything we went over helped me. The more we went over the more I understood what was expected.

How many drafts of this paper do you think you wrote and how/when did you write them? For example, did you compose at the keyboard, did you write lots of notes to yourself, did you pre-write or outline, did you write in small chunks of time or sit down and produce an entire draft at one sitting?

I only wrote the two. I totally critique my papers as I write them. I read and erase a thousand times as I am writing.

What would you do differently with this paper to make it more effectively, or what did you try to do that you just don’t think you got a good handle on?

I would try to make it flow together a little better and not try to make it sound like two separate essays.

What are most pleased with about this paper?

I feel like I was better at providing examples to support my opinion in an essay

Review of English 100

Review of English 100

                I will admit I have never been a fan of English class or writing so when I started this class I did not expect to get much from it. As I started attending class I actually became interested in it which is a big surprise for me because, I have never liked this type of thing before. I learned a lot of things I didn’t know before about writing and surprisingly I learned a few things about reading as well. The main thing I learned was how to analyze what I am reading and writing. I have just recently noticed how much more I have been analyzing things I have been reading a lot more and actually understanding what I am reading. I have been trying to understand everything I have been reading lately. I really liked the way Ms. C taught the class she really helped me understand things I was doing. I could email her any time and she got back to me very quick and never had a problem helping me with anything. I will say overall I really enjoyed this class. I have Ms. C next semester for 104 and I am excited about it.  

America Needs its Nerds

This essay is very true America would idolize the football player instead of the intellectiual. How are we going to stay on top where it is considered to be uncool to be smart. I have always felt pro athletes are getting paid a lot of money to play a kids game honestly. There are thousands of kids that devote there lives to being a pro athlete and dont make it that could have really helped society. Maybe a the best athletes should be saving lives not playing a game

Task Three Reflection

The only story I feel I could relate to was “Let Teen-Agers Try Adulthood”. I have never been racially discriminated against for being white. The only thing I can relate to is the fact that I used to play football from elementary to high school. And they took it a lot easier on us. You always knew who played football because, our team had us wear our jerseys to school every Friday for my entire life. I never realized the fact till I got a little older that half the audience at our games were teachers. And there were always rivalries between schools. At Central High School things were really easy for football and basketball players. Teachers took those two sports very serious. Botstein talked about the fact that sports dominated over culture even. He touches the fact teachers are often former coaches. And teacher for three classes were current coaches.    

Task Three Evaluation

The essay I choose as “Let Teen-Agers Try Adulthood” by Leon Botstein. I agree and disagree with points made. The fact he feels that the typical American High School is outdated and there needs to be some changes made. The fact that the system is set up for some to fail. The fact he says team sports dominated everything even student culture. I personally saw this with my own eyes. There was more than one occasion when I played football at Central High School that an assignment I didn’t do was just looked over by teachers because we played an away game or sometimes a game at home even. My football coach taught two classes I had. It seemed the classes were mainly football players and we all did well. It is the cliques are a big problem and the jocks were a clique and considered the insiders and all others were outsiders. And there were many more cliques though and everybody seemed to stick with there own.

            But in Botsteins essay I do not agree that students should be graduating at sixteen years old. Most people are just not mature enough at sixteen to make an adult decision at that age. I know from my own personal experience that I thought I knew everything at that age and I actually knew nothing. Botsteins says thatsays that American Teenagers are ready and prepared. For the most what I have seen nobody I know was actually ready. You can ask anyone and that made most of the mistakes would have changed at that point in

Task Three Introduction

I decided to come to college to try and further my education to do more in life than what I was. I tried just going out into the world on my high school diploma and if you want to make good money you have to work yourself to death and I really got tired of doing that. Plus I was working myself to death and just getting by. I was the nightshift supervisor at taco bell for three years. Then I thought I could do better in factory work and found out that is about the worst kind of work to do. I drove a forklift at a couple factories and they really just weren’t good jobs they didn’t pay good. I later noticed I actually made more supervising Taco Bell than working in factories. Which totally contradicted my reason for leaving on the first place. I was always a good student in high school I did pretty well. I graduated with a 3.7 gpa and had a couple scholarship offers in Florida and Mississippi. But, I thought I would do fine without college I was very wrong.

A college degree to me means that I accomplished something in life. It is a personal goal I set for myself. In American society it means you further your training to go into the field you have. That you put extra commitment to being a better employee in your field.  It just sets you up much better to start your own life that a high school diploma ever could.

Task Two Self Evaluation

• What is the thesis for your paper?

• List the main points you make in your paper.

• What was the most helpful advice you received from your peer evaluation?

• What was the most helpful information you received in class for your paper?

• How many drafts of this paper do you think you wrote and how/when did you write them? For example, did you compose at the keyboard, did you write lots of notes to yourself, did you pre-write or outline, did you write in small chunks of time or sit down and produce an entire draft at one sitting?

• What would you do differently with this paper to make it more effectively, or what did you try to do that you just don’t think you got a good handle on?

• What are most pleased with about this paper?

My thesis was about my mother and the struggles she had to overcome to get to where she is today and how her success has helped drive me towards success. Her struggles actually helped me realize some of the things I had to be successful in my life.

My mother had a child in high school that caused her to drop out. The struggles I watched her go through gave me me drive to succeed at what I am doing. I remember being poor when I was younger but, when she got through things dramatically changed for the best.

The best advice I got was the comments left on my rough draft by MS. Chastain and the people I did peer evaluations with.

I took notes on my interview then I composed them at the keyboard as I typed the rough draft and my final draft was pretty much my rough draft with corrections and more details.

I added more details to my story but, I still feel that I didn’t have enough. I have trouble placing details and staying on track. I can tend to get way off base.

I feel I did a much better job than I did on task one.