Task Three Evaluation

The essay I choose as “Let Teen-Agers Try Adulthood” by Leon Botstein. I agree and disagree with points made. The fact he feels that the typical American High School is outdated and there needs to be some changes made. The fact that the system is set up for some to fail. The fact he says team sports dominated everything even student culture. I personally saw this with my own eyes. There was more than one occasion when I played football at Central High School that an assignment I didn’t do was just looked over by teachers because we played an away game or sometimes a game at home even. My football coach taught two classes I had. It seemed the classes were mainly football players and we all did well. It is the cliques are a big problem and the jocks were a clique and considered the insiders and all others were outsiders. And there were many more cliques though and everybody seemed to stick with there own.

            But in Botsteins essay I do not agree that students should be graduating at sixteen years old. Most people are just not mature enough at sixteen to make an adult decision at that age. I know from my own personal experience that I thought I knew everything at that age and I actually knew nothing. Botsteins says thatsays that American Teenagers are ready and prepared. For the most what I have seen nobody I know was actually ready. You can ask anyone and that made most of the mistakes would have changed at that point in

Task Three Introduction

I decided to come to college to try and further my education to do more in life than what I was. I tried just going out into the world on my high school diploma and if you want to make good money you have to work yourself to death and I really got tired of doing that. Plus I was working myself to death and just getting by. I was the nightshift supervisor at taco bell for three years. Then I thought I could do better in factory work and found out that is about the worst kind of work to do. I drove a forklift at a couple factories and they really just weren’t good jobs they didn’t pay good. I later noticed I actually made more supervising Taco Bell than working in factories. Which totally contradicted my reason for leaving on the first place. I was always a good student in high school I did pretty well. I graduated with a 3.7 gpa and had a couple scholarship offers in Florida and Mississippi. But, I thought I would do fine without college I was very wrong.

A college degree to me means that I accomplished something in life. It is a personal goal I set for myself. In American society it means you further your training to go into the field you have. That you put extra commitment to being a better employee in your field.  It just sets you up much better to start your own life that a high school diploma ever could.

Task Two Self Evaluation

• What is the thesis for your paper?

• List the main points you make in your paper.

• What was the most helpful advice you received from your peer evaluation?

• What was the most helpful information you received in class for your paper?

• How many drafts of this paper do you think you wrote and how/when did you write them? For example, did you compose at the keyboard, did you write lots of notes to yourself, did you pre-write or outline, did you write in small chunks of time or sit down and produce an entire draft at one sitting?

• What would you do differently with this paper to make it more effectively, or what did you try to do that you just don’t think you got a good handle on?

• What are most pleased with about this paper?

My thesis was about my mother and the struggles she had to overcome to get to where she is today and how her success has helped drive me towards success. Her struggles actually helped me realize some of the things I had to be successful in my life.

My mother had a child in high school that caused her to drop out. The struggles I watched her go through gave me me drive to succeed at what I am doing. I remember being poor when I was younger but, when she got through things dramatically changed for the best.

The best advice I got was the comments left on my rough draft by MS. Chastain and the people I did peer evaluations with.

I took notes on my interview then I composed them at the keyboard as I typed the rough draft and my final draft was pretty much my rough draft with corrections and more details.

I added more details to my story but, I still feel that I didn’t have enough. I have trouble placing details and staying on track. I can tend to get way off base.

I feel I did a much better job than I did on task one.